I just entered Cherie Reich's 2nd annual flash fiction blogfest. This is a great way to meet other bloggers/writers and see other writing styles. But you don't have much time so check out her blog post Here and give it a go. Below are the blogfest rules from Cherie's post:
Here are the rules:
1. Entries must begin with the two words: Lightning flashed.
2. Entries must be 300 words or less and be in prose. I'm not versed enough in poetry verse to judge it properly.
3. Entries must be posted on your blog between May 21 - 23.
4. You must sign up in the linky below to have your entry be counted.
On May 25, I will announce the six finalists and open voting through May 28th.
On May 29th, my third year blogversary, I will announce the 1st, 2nd, and 3rd place winners as well as a random winner selected from the participants list. All ties will be broken by Random.org.
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And here is my entry weighing in at 285 words:
And here is my entry weighing in at 285 words:
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Lightning flashed in her eyes as she unsheathed
her crystal flyssa. It was time to start killing monsters.
She stood completely relaxed with a loose grip
around the hilt of her elegant sword. She let the razor sharp tip flirt with
the ale soaked tavern floor as she sized up her opponents. It was a cocky
stance, but after 200 years of battling ghouls and their bastard hybrids, an on
guard stance would be a waste of energy. Besides, she wanted to have a little fun
tonight, it’s not like anyone was waiting for her at home.
Her first move—flawless. Dropping on one knee
and spinning 180 degrees, the flyssa cut through the air on a horizontal plane
slicing across the soft underbelly of a charging ghoul. Shrieks filled the air
as entrails tumbled to the floor. Two attackers immediately charged from either
side. She sidestepped the first hitting the ghoul with the back of the hilt and
with a reverse cut, sliced the other’s head clean off. Thump. Then, another ghoul
came at her on the left. No time for fancy footwork, a quick shuffle step and
an over the head vertical cut to the top of its crown was enough. The ghoul
staggered to a halt, its mouth gaped open in a muted scream as the top of its
head opened like a book.
She scanned the room for more attackers but the
tavern had cleared out with one exception, a woman sitting cross-legged on the
bar in a dress made for sex. Relaxing her stance she wiped her sword clean on
the rags of her victim, sheathed the weapon, and zeroed in her gaze back on the
woman at the bar.
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So this entry is a little on the "what the eff?" side, sorry. But what can I say...it's been one of those weeks.
Looking forward to reading all your entries though!!!! (:
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Well written with good descriptions, I could 'see' the action. I could almost taste the blood!! Good luck.
ReplyDeleteNow this is my kinda story. Love it! :)
ReplyDeleteI thought your story was very Ghoul :)~
ReplyDeleteSo THAT's what a battle goddess thinks in the midst of conflict. :)
ReplyDeleteI loved this! Your battle descriptions are sharp and exciting!
ReplyDeleteEnergetic swordplay and a feisty protag makes this a lot of fun! I also like the tension and dynamics raised at the end.
ReplyDelete(one minor copy edit suggestion: "loose" instead of "lose")
EEEEEK! I ALWAYS get that backwards! Thanks for pointing that out, I'll change it after voting on the 25th. (:
DeleteSally: Thanks Sally, glad I got you into the scene. (:
ReplyDeleteAnna: Thank you, glad you enjoyed it!
Mark: LOL! Tks (:
Crystal Collier: Battle goddess...I like it!
Jake De Trempe: Thank you!
Oh I love the action in this piece. It's incredible. I love your use of colorful verbs and imagery.
ReplyDeleteFlash fiction was made for fun moments like these! Love the action and the mystery. Great job. :)
ReplyDeleteCherie: And thank you for organizing this rockin blogfest! (:
ReplyDeleteMichael: Merci, you just made my day. (:
Christine: Thanks, FF is a lot of fun and a great way to let loose!
This was exciting and dangerous, filled with blood and entrails, and fun... all wrapped in a neat package! I loved the descriptive precision of your MC's movements...
ReplyDeletecan i please have a sword like that, puhleeease!! :)
ReplyDeleteThis was a very fun story! It would be nice as part of a larger piece, too. :)
ReplyDeleteGREAT first line! Wonderful showing of the scene. I felt like I was there.
ReplyDeleteMichelle: You're the second person to mention the word "blood" with respect to my scene, and yet, I never wrote the word "blood." The fact that people are "seeing" blood without me actually writing the word is a great compliment. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteAndrea: LOL! And yes, but use it wisely... (:
Becky: This was fun to write and extending it into a larger piece is tempting... (=
Scribbles From Jenn: Thank you! (:
I like the imagery you have created with your words - fun entry!
ReplyDeleteLove the character and her strength!
ReplyDeleteOh My Gosh! That was awesome. Love how you use the word "flirt" in there. And his head opened like a book. Ugh! Gross but super imargery. I'm wondering who the woman is sitting at the bar. Great job and good luck!
ReplyDeleteThat did not suck at all, Elise. It was great! I love it
ReplyDeleteVery cool flash fiction piece. I loved all the action in it.
ReplyDeleteI'll announce the finalists tomorrow.
Julie: Thank you, glad you enjoyed it. (:
ReplyDeleteMelinda: Thank you! I like strong women characters (:
Julia: Thanks! And the woman at the bar...humm...lets just say in my mind...the "real" action takes place right after this scene. LOL!
Jessica: Haha, I didn't think anyone read my crazy tags! (:
Cherie: Thank you! (:
Great, powerful lines like "Shrieks filled the air as entrails tumbled to the floor..." and "...the top of its head opened like a book..." were thrilling to read. Fantastic!
ReplyDeleteSome Dark Romantic
Wonderful action and just a little bit gory. I loved it! :)
ReplyDeleteMina: Thank you! So glad you enjoyed it, and to be honest, it was fun to write. (;
ReplyDeleteMichael: Finding the right balance between over the top and not too shabby is difficult, but it helps having a 300 word limit. Thanks for the comment! (:
Awesome action scene! :-D
ReplyDeleteThanks Misha!
DeleteGreat action scene. It doesn't sound like what-the-eff at all. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Medeia and congrats on making it into the finals! (:
DeleteVery graphic, I like it! I could 'see' the movement and almost heard her breath. Nice!
ReplyDeleteRoadtrip: On my way from A all the way to Z!
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Thanks Barbara! (=
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